In class 3 we have been reading Charlie and The Chocolate Factory by Roald Dahl. We have been practising our persuasive writing skills. We have had lots of fun applying for the job as Chief Chocolate Taster at Willy Wonkas factory. We’d love to know what you think about them.
Wanted – A sweet tooth and creative mind.
Mr Willy Wonka seeks a chocolate expert to join his team to help ensure that all of the Wonka products are perfect. The ideal candidate will have all their own teeth, the ability to eat sweets all day without being sick and lots and lots of experience in munching, crunching, melting and chewing chocolate. Other duties will include the testing of Everlasting Gobstoppers, jellies, jelly beans and candy canes. You must be prepared to take your work home with you. People trying to lose weight or seeking a healthy lifestyle need not apply.
Closing date: Friday 15th January 2016
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonkas Chocolate Factory
Factory Road
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Wonka
I hope you don’t mind me writing to apply for the job a Chief Chocolate Taster in your amazing chocolate factory. Everyone agrees that you are the most brilliant and inventive chocolate maker I would eat your chocolate all day.
I have my own teeth, I won’t be sick and I would eat all the chocolate that you want me to. You have the most delicious and amazing chocolate. Could your chocolate factory live without me?
Your sincerely
Harry
Dear Harry,
Thank you for applying for the job of chief taster. You are very kind with your comments that I am the most brilliant and inventive chocolate maker, I do have to agree, Wonka chocolate is best.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Well done Harry, you have included a fact, a rhetorical question and the qualities Mr Wonka is looking for in his advert. 2TP. Next time try to include 3 paragraphs.
well done harry AMAZING 😀 very good wow words great work. Next step try to describe a bit more about you.
WELL DONE HARRY !!!!!!!!!!! i like your ending
Mr Willy Wonka,
Willy Wonkas Chocolate Factory,
Factory Road,
London,
NW1 4SA,
Dear Mr Wonka,
I am writing to apply for the job of Chief Chocolate Taster. I would really appreciate it if you chose me for this amazing job.
I would be good at this job because I have good taste buds and I would be able to tell you how it tastes. (They all taste really creamy, chocolatey and amazing).
You are, as everyone knows, the greatest chocolate maker in the world. I would be honoured to work for you and being able to eat your delicious chocolate bars almost all day at work would just be incredible!
Can your factory exist without me? Well can it? Can it? Do you agree with me? If so please pick me for this AMAZING opportunity.
Yours sincerely
Kasey
Dear Kasey,
Thank you very much for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is great to know that you have good taste buds and identifying how creamy the chocolate is would definitely be an advantage.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Well done Kasey, you have used lots of the persuasive features we have been practising including rhetorical questions. 2TP. Next time try to include more of the features Mr Wonka asks for in the advert such as: I have all my own sparkling, bright, white teeth that are perfect for biting into your scrumptious sweets and chocolates.
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonkas Chocolate Factory
Factory Lane
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Wonka
I am writing to apply for a job in your factory as chief chocolate taster. I would be very good at being Chief chocolate taster. I can eat chocolate with out being sick. You can rely on me as Chief Chocolate Taster .
Chocolate is my destiny, are fabulous at making Chocolate!! Please give me the job.
I have got all of my teeth and I am fine with taking work with me.
Yours sincerely
Ben
Well done Ben, you have included most of the qualities Mr Wonka is looking for in his Chief Chocolate Taster. 2TP. Next time try to include more persuasive features such as rhetorical questions and groups of 3 adjectives.
Dear Ben,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is great to know that the job wouldn’t make you sick, being poorly all day would be no fun at all and having fun is essential for working in my factory. Having all your own teeth will also be very useful.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s Chocolate Factory
Factory Lane
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Wonka
I am writing to ask for the job of Chief Chocolate Taster. I know more people will be asking for this job however I have talent’s that include chocolate tasting. I think you are the best chocolate maker in the world, your chocolate is mouth- watering, magnificent and melt in the mouth.
I can eat as much chocolate and sugary snacks as you want and I would never be sick. I would be happy to take home whatever I need to have tasted. I will be able to eat 99% of chocolate every day. My destiny is to be a chief chocolate taster.
In my opinion your chocolate factory is the best and you are the most brilliant inventor of chocolate. You have the worlds best chocolate that melts, and your melting chocolate is the best and most delicious. I have all my white and shining teeth. Can your factory exist with out me?
Your sincerely
Keira
Well done Keira, you have included all of the qualities Mr Wonka is looking for in his Chief Chocolate Taster and used all of the persuasive features we have been practising! 3TP. Next time try to use more adventurous adjectives.
Dear Keira,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. I love your description of my chocolate as “mouth- watering, magnificent and melt in the mouth”, I may start putting that on my wrappers! It is great to know that you not only have all of your own teeth, but they are white and shining, ideal for big smiles.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Well done Keira you have remembered a forester from Oakley
Thank you for that oakley that was very nice of you
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s Chocolate Factory
Factory Lane
London
NW1 4SE
Dear Mr Wonka
I am writing to apply for a job as Chief Chocolate Taster.
I would excellent at this job because I am really good at tasting the chocolate. I have all my own teeth and I have loads of experience at tasting your crunchy, tremendous, tasty, chocolate.
I could eat chocolate all day and night without being sick. I would be happy to take your wonderful chocolate home with me. I would be perfect for this job can your factory be fantastic without me?
Yours sincerely
Kevin
Mr. Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s Chocolate Factory
Factory rood
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Wonka
I am writing to apply for the job as Chief Chocolate Taster.
I would be fantastic at this job because I have all my own teeth and I have lots of experience at tasting the crunchy, tasty and amazing chocolate that you make. I can eat chocolate all day. I would be happy to take your wonderful chocolate home with me.
I would be perfect for this job. Can your factory be fabulous without me?
Your Sincerely
Jake
Well done Jake, you have included lots of persuasive features including a rhetorical question. 2TP. Next time try to include alliteration.
Dear Jake,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is great news that you can eat chocolate all day, I hope you would be able to cope with other sweets too – I’m sure that you could. I like the fact that you could take your work home, more time to test my chocolate!
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s Chocolate Factory
Factory Lane
London
NW1 4SE
Dear Mr Wonka
I am writing to apply for a job as Chief Chocolate Taster.
I would excellent at this job because I am really good at tasting the chocolate. I have all my own teeth and I have loads of experience at tasting your crunchy, tremendous, tasty, chocolate.
I could eat chocolate all day and night without being sick. I would be happy to take your wonderful chocolate home with me. I would be perfect for this job can your factory be fantastic without me?
Yours sincerely
Kevin
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s Chocolate Factory
Factory road
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Wonka,
I am writing to apply for the job of Chief Chocolate Taster. I am the most brilliant taster. Your chocolate will be nothing without me!
I am a tremendous taster. I think that I could taste every flavour of Everlasting Gobstoppers and I know they will be awesomely chewy. I have lots and lots of experience in tasting. I have my own teeth and I won’t be sick. Your chocolate is amazing.
I am happy to take your crunchy, creamy chocolate home. I love your chocolate. Can your factory exist without me ?
Yours sincerely
Ashley
Well done Ashley, you have included all the qualities Mr Wonka is looking for in his Chief Chocolate Taster and you have used lots of persuasive features too! 3TP. Next time try to include a fact or statistic.
Dear Ashley,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It does sound like you have many of the qualities I am looking for, it does concern me that my chocolate will be nothing without your help, I thought we were doing quite well.
It is wonderful that you have thought about my other products and an Everlasting Gobstopper tester would be very useful, it can take quite a long time.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka Chocolate Factory
Factory Road
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Wonka,
I am writing to you for the job of chief chocolate tester. I saw the advert. I have excellent taste buds and I can eat chocolate with out being sick.
I’ve got a sweet tooth. I am not losing weight I have to go past your factory every day and it is great. You are the best.
Your chocolate is great, excellent, brilliant. I want to work with you.
Can your factory exist without me?
Your Sincerely
Oakley
Well done Oakley, you have used lots of adjectives and a rhetorical question. 2TP. Next time try to include some repetition and alliteration.
Dear Oakley,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is great to hear that you can eat chocolate without being sick and it sounds like your taste buds are ideal for the job.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka
Factor Road
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Willy Wonka
I am writing to ask you for a job as Chief Chocolate Taster. Tasting chocolate is my destination.
I am so good because I have amazing taste buds and i will be able to taste the sweet, crunchy, melting chocolate. I would be so good as your Chief Chocolate Taster, because chocolate is my favourite thing. I would be able to turn into a pig and eat as much as possible and I would eat chocolate without being sick. I would be able to talk and tell you if it is nice. I eat like a pig with chocolate.
I have my own teeth, I will also eat the Everlasting Gobstoppers. I am also not losing weight so I would be amazing. I will be prepared to take work home with me. Can your Factory exist without me? It is certain that you are the best!
Yours Sincerely
Zara
Well done Zara, you have included all the features Mr Wonka asked for in his advert and you have included persuasive features including a rhetorical question. 2TP. Next time try to include some alliteration.
Dear Zara,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It certainly sounds like you are a fan of chocolate, I’m not sure that actually turning into a pig will be necessary, but it does show your commitment to the job. I like the fact that you are interested in my other products too. I also appreciate your certainty that I am the best, I have to agree.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Wonka’s chocolate factory
Factory road
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Wonka
I am writing to apply for a job at your factory as Chief Chocolate Taster. You should pick me because I am the most tremendous person ever. Tasting chocolate is what I do. My taste buds are extremely sensitive. I will be the perfect person. No one can be better than me, please pick me. I love your chocolate.
I just adore chocolate. It’s lovely isn’t it? I will eat all the chocolate you want me to. I am the best. Can your factory go on without me?
I have lots of experience. This is truly my job. You should definitely pick me. I am the one and only.
Your Sincerely
Michael
Well done Michael, you have used lots of rhetorical questions and persuasive phrases. 2TP. Next time try to include groups of 3 adjectives and include more of the features Mr Wonka asks for in the advert such as: I have all my own sparkling, bright, white teeth that are perfect for biting into your scrumptious sweets and chocolates.
Dear Michael,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is wonderful that you have so much experience of tasting chocolate and have such sensitive taste buds. I do also think chocolate is lovely and I think we would have a brilliant time working together.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonkas Chocolate Factory
Factory Road
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Wonka
I am writing to apply for a job at your chocolate factory. I won’t be sick although I eat lots of sweets and chocolate. I will help you do anything. Chocolate is the most delicious thing ever. Crunchy, sugary snacks are the best. You are the best chocolate maker ever. Everyone will love your invention.
Everyone will be lining up at the chocolate gates. Would you like everyone there? By the way I have all my teeth. You are the chocolate inventor in the world. You are the best chocolate maker ever. Do you want everyone to stuff there faces with chocolate and sweets.
Yours sincerely
Millie
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonkas Chocolate Factory
Factory Road
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Wonka
I am writing to apply for a job at your chocolate factory. I won’t be sick although I eat lots of sweets and chocolate. I will help you do anything. Chocolate is the most delicious thing ever. Crunchy, sugary snacks are the best. You are the best chocolate maker ever. Everyone will love your invention.
Everyone will be lining up at the chocolate gates. Would you like everyone there? By the way I have all my teeth. You are the chocolate inventor in the world. You are the best chocolate maker ever. Do you want everyone to stuff there faces with chocolate and sweets.
Yours sincerely
Millie
Well done Millie, you have used lots of emotive language and rhetorical questions in your letter. 2TP. Next time remember to use question marks at the end of your rhetorical questions and make your letters at least 3 paragraphs long.
Dear Millie,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is great to hear that the job would not make you sick and you would help everyone to love my inventions, that is the sort of spirit we need. It is lovely that you believe me to be the best chocolate maker ever, I have to agree.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
It’s a convincing letter I hope you get a job looks promising .
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s Chocolate factory
Factory road
London
NW14SA
Dear Mr Willy Wonka
I am writing to apply to be the chief chocolate taster.I am the best chocolate taster in the world. I can eat chocolate for a day with out being sick.
Tasting chocolate is my destiny. Everyone knows your the best maker in the world infact I think out of all of the chocolate makers in the world I think yours is the best!! Your creamy crunchy chocolate is the best in the world !
It is certain that your the best chocolate maker in the world. Your definitely the master of making chocolate . Could your chocolate factory exist with out me?
Yours Sincerely
Samuel
Well done Samuel, you have used great alliteration in your group of 3 adjectives and I love your sentence about choclate tasting being your destiny. Mr Wonka would find your appliction very hard to ignore. 2TP. Next time try and include a statistic in your letter.
Dear Samuel,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is great that you think that I am best out of all the chocolate makers in the world, this makes me feel good. It is also useful that you would not feel sick after a day, hopefully you could survive a whole week too.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s chocolate factory
Factory Road
London
NW1 4SA
I am writing to apply for job of chief chocolate taster. You should pick me because I can eat chocolate all day without feeling sick. I hope you pick me. I am just the person for the job.
You are the greatest chocolate maker in the world. And since you are, I can’t wait till you to pick somebody. It just has to be me. Can your chocolate factory exist without me?
If you pick me I will eat all of the chocolate you want me to. You’re the most brilliant, fantastic and extraordinary chocolate maker in the whole wide world and you make the best, magnificent, and mouthwatering chocolate in the whole wide world . So, you should pick me for the job.
Yours Sincerely
Nathan
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonkas Chocolate Factory
Factory road
London
NW1 4sa
Dear Mr Wonka
I am writing to say that I will be your best chocolate taster ever so please give me the job . I will be so good that I could have your chocolate every single day . I do not feel sick at all when I have your chocolate .
If you give me the Job I would be so happy and I will do anything you. I love your chocolate so can you give me more chocolate .
Your sincerely
Ellie
Well done Ellie, you have included lots of emotive language. 2TP. Next time try to include groups of 3 adjectives to describe Mr Wonka’s chocolate and remember letters need to have at least paragraphs.
Dear Ellie,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. I love your confidence that you would be the best ever and it is nice that my chocolate does not make you feel sick.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka,
Willy Wonkas Chocolate Factory,
Factory Road,
London,
NW1 4SA,
Dear Mr Wonka,
I admire your chocolate and I would like to apply for the job of Chief Chocolate Taster. I love tasting your chocolate. I would tell you if it is good or bad. For example, the Wonka bar is amazing. You are the luckiest person in the world.
I can eat chocolate without being sick. You are the amazing inventor.
Can your factory exist without me?
Yours sincerely
Ashlee
Well done Ashlee, you have included a great rhetorical question. 2TP. Next time try to include more information from the advert in your reply, such as: I could eat your fabulous, mouth-watering chocolate and sweets all day without being sick.
Dear Ashlee,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. Thank you also for recognising me as the amazing inventor, I really am. It is good that you love tasting my chocolate, I’m sure the job would make you very happy.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s chocolate Factory
Factory road
London
NW1 4SA
Dear Mr Willy Wonka
I am writing to apply for job of Chief Chocolate Taster. I will blow your socks off with my tasting of your mouth watering chocolate.
Mr Wonka,I taste all the time, give me something to taste and I will. Don’t worry I am the person for the job. If you let me have the job you will be fabulous with your creations.
Your chocolate is a creamy, tasty delight and I love it! I have lots of ideas for you.
You need to think about it because without me you will be nothing. Do you want me?
Your sincerely
Sasha
Well done Sasha, Mr Wonka would definitely find it hard to ignore your persuasive features. 2TP. Next time try to include alliteration and groups of 3 adjectives.
Dear Sasha,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is wonderful that you think that you will bow my socks off with your tasting, I think I shall start carrying spare pairs of socks with me just in case. It sounds like you certainly like tasting, this must be your ideal job.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s chocolate factory
Factory Road
London
NW1 4SA
I am writing to apply for job of chief chocolate taster. You should pick me because I can eat chocolate all day without feeling sick. I hope you pick me. I am just the person for the job.
You are the greatest chocolate maker in the world. And since you are, I can’t wait till you to pick somebody. It just has to be me. Can your chocolate factory exist without me?
If you pick me I will eat all of the chocolate you want me to. You’re the most brilliant, fantastic and extraordinary chocolate maker in the whole wide world and you make the best, magnificent, and mouthwatering chocolate in the whole wide world . So, you should pick me for the job.
Yours Sincerely
Nathan
Well done Nathan, great use of alliteration and rhetorical questions.2TP. Next time try to use more of the features Mr Wonka asked for in his advert, such as: I have all my own sparkling, bright, white teeth perfect for biting into your delicious chocolate.
Dear Nathan,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. Being able to eat chocolate all day without being sick is a very good start, hopefully you like other sweets too. I love your description of me as the “most brilliant, fantastic and extraordinary chocolate maker in the whole wide world” – it makes me feel very good to hear that.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s Chocolate Factory
Factory Road
London
NW1 4SA
Dr Mr Wonka
I am writing to ask for the job of Chief Chocolate Taster because I have heard that you’re the most brilliant chocolate maker in the world. You are a brilliant chocolate maker Willy Wonka. Your chocolate looks tasty. Your factory looks the best. Your chocolate looks beautiful.
It looks the best. I am good in factory’s. I am a fun boy. You would like me. It is my ambition to work in a chocolate factory. I am brilliant at games.
Your chocolate looks so delicious. I want a taste of your chocolate. I am a brilliant artist. That’s how fantastic I am. Would your factory exist with me?
Your sincerely
Joseph
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s Chocolate Factory
Factory Road
London
NW1 4SA
Dr Mr Wonka
I am writing to ask for the job of Chief Chocolate Taster because I have heard that you’re the most brilliant chocolate maker in the world. You are a brilliant chocolate maker Willy Wonka. Your chocolate looks tasty. Your factory looks the best. Your chocolate looks beautiful.
It looks the best. I am good in factory’s. I am a fun boy. You would like me. It is my ambition to work in a chocolate factory. I am brilliant at games.
Your chocolate looks so delicious. I want a taste of your chocolate. I am a brilliant artist. That’s how fantastic I am. Would your factory be able to exist without me?
Your sincerely
Joseph
Well done Joseph, you have used lots of emotive language to persuade Mr Wonka to give you a job. 2TP. Next time try to include alliteration in your persuasive writing.
Dear Joseph,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is great to hear that you think that my chocolate looks tasty, hopefully it tastes great too. It certainly sounds like you enjoy having fun, that is very important for anyone working in my factory.
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Mr Willy Wonka
Willy Wonka’s Chocolate factory
Factory road
London
Dear Mr Willy Wonka
I am writing to you because I am loving your chocolate and I am munching your creamy lovely chocolate and I am wondering if I can get the job of chief chocolate taster because I want to know how the chocolate is made.It is fabulous chocolate besides know one would dump your chocolate.
Since your chocolate is amazing it’s the most creamiest, crunchiest, sparkliest chocolate in the whole of London. You are the most amazing chocolate maker! That is brilliant because you are the only chocolate maker I know. I am so happy that I would taste chocolate and lots of other things that were so tasty.
I loved the chocolate I tasted because it was made by you Mr Wonka, so can I have the Job? I would like to be your helper in the Factory because I love your chocolate then I would make your chocolate the most sweetest chocolate in the whole Factory. Would your factory go on without me?
Your Sincerely
Morgan
Well done Morgan, you have used lovely adjectives and rhetorical questions to persuade Mr Wonka. 2TP. Next time try to use more exaggeration in your persuasive writing.
Dear Morgan,
Thank you for applying for the job of Chief Taster. It is lovely that you think that my chocolate is “the most creamiest, crunchiest, sparkliest chocolate in the whole of London”, I have to agree. It certainly sounds like you enjoy my chocolate and sweets, maybe you are the right person for the job?
I will be considering all of the applications and I will get back to you should you be successful in getting to the next stage,
Please do continue to enjoy chocolate,
Yours sincerely,
Willie Wonka
Dear Class 3,
Mrs Slesser has contacted me and asked why I have spelt my name Willie, rather than Willy which is more commonly used.
My name is actually William and I use Willie for private conversations because that is how my Mum spelled it. Those pesky marketing people made me use the “y” because it is more trendy, as if it makes the chocolate taste any different!
Hope that clears it up,
Your friend,
Willie (Willy) Wonka
Dear Class 3,
Mrs Slesser has contacted me and asked why I have spelt my name Willie, rather than Willy which is more commonly used.
My name is actually William and I use Willie for private conversations because that is how my Mum spelled it. Those pesky marketing people made me use the “y” because it is more trendy, as if it makes the chocolate taste any different!
Hope that clears it up,
Your friend,
Willie (Willy) Wonka