Walcott Class 3 – Literacy Homework
As part of our visual literacy, Class 3 at Walcott have been exploring a virtual world on the iPads. Recently, we came across a mysterious house surrounded by woods. Can you write a description of this house, as part of the fantasy story? Try to remember what people told you to improve, from your last piece of writing. You may post your new writing on the blog or write it below.
Steps to success:
- Use similes, metaphors and personification.
- Write in the 3rd person.
- Write in the past tense.
Tengami house description by Matthew
On the most starriest night ever, the sherbet like moon filled the sky with its most brightest shine ever. As the samurai warrior got closer to the rickety old hut, he said to himself “i am going to explore” so he went in the house. When he got in he came across a lotus flower but the flower was fenced off so he couldn’t get to it. So went to go see if he could find a secret tunnel and he eventually found one. So he went in and followed it and it took him to the lotus flower so he took it and he teliported back to were he started.
Wow! Brilliant homework Matthew. 🙂 2tp. I like the opening description, it’s very exciting. Try not to rush your detail for the second part and maybe use paragraphs.
Great comment mr Mr mcann 🙂
Well done Matthew! – Tiffany 😀
A clear short story Matthew but try not to use went ocationally.
From nell 🙂
Realy good use of adjectives! From Connor
The tengami house by Megan
In the middle of the misty woods in japan is a house. This is no ordinary house and it was no ordanariy land a house full of mystery. The moon glowed like a huge lightbulb and the air was so still you could hear the sound of you breathing. The house was made with wood and paper and built on stilts. It had a light that was as bright as the sun. This house had rusty old stairs to to the first floor to get inside the house. They had a dusty old rug that nearly filled the hole room.The fences stood as still as really heavy rock. The house was as still as a fossil of a dinosaur. The sky turned really dark. It was so dark you couldn’t see a single thing only with the light turned on. It was dark as a bears cave just in really high in the sky and I mean very high in the sky. As midnight appeared the sky was total dark dark black. As midnight passed by were there was no darkness it suddenly became morning. It was the early morning on Tuesday the sun was so bright it was like a lightbulb but in the sky.
Wow Megan! 😀 This is a wonderful description. 2tp. Next time, you could group your sentences into paragraphs.
Thank you mr McCann for my comment . 😀 from Megan
Wow Megan great work!-joe 🙂
Megan amazing piece of work! From Connor
I like your description of the house Megan it is a really well structured piece of writing.
Tengami description by Evie.p
One clear winters night when the diamond moon shone through the snow filled clouds, there stood a mysterious hut. The hut was ancient and stood like a lonely statue in the middle of the clearing. The black roof protecting the hut looked like a samurai’s helmet and guarded the maze like patterns underneath. The immense windows looked out at the bleak view and a soft glow shone through from the inside welcoming the owners home.
The hut stood silently in an opening of the woods where the only sound was a family of wolves howling into the night and the footsteps of the warrior walking round the balcony keeping watch.
Evie I really like yours 😀 from Megan
Absolutely amazing 🙂 great use of metaphors and personification Evie. You could try and use more similes. From Nell
Evie great piece of work. It’s amazing! From Connor
WOW! Evie that is an amazing piece of writing. Well done.
Tengami house by Aaron
On a dark and gloomy night there was a wooden house standing alone in the woods. The wooden house looked like a chicken hut that was surrounded by fences. It was a lonely house with a single lotus flower inside which was guarded by a fence. The house was surrended by a bright light downstairs but upstairs the house was dark cold and scary. The only sounds came from the trees dancing in the wind and the howling of the wolves.
Chloe’s tengami house
On a clear foggy sky, a man was walking through the spooky woods when he saw a house (hut even!) But before, he spotted the moon. It was like a big nightlight in the midnight sky. then he said to himself “I wonder if no one would mind if I have an explore!” So he had an explore around the rickety old hut.
The windows were as dirty as a box with lots of mud inside. the grass was as blue as the blue sea in winter! And the stairs! Well, when you walk up the stairs it’s like it will take you forever!
Describing the house by Tiffany!
As the wind howled the midnight sky casted over the shadowy land. Everything stood still. A house could be seen in the distance. It stood out from all the other nocturnal nightmares. There was something about it that was far from ordinary. Was it the glow that came out of the windows like bars of gold? Who knows what was in there? It seemed to cry for company. The wolves howled once again and everything drifted of to another sleepless night.
Tiffany brilliant short piece of work! From Connor
I love it Tiffany- Mercedes
Tengami house description
On a dark starry night the moon was shining onto a house surrounded by woods. The house had some stairs to go up so you could get into the mysterious house. Inside of the house there was some thing pink glowing inside. The pink light was a pink flower trapped in a metal cage. The windows on the house where glass and they had some patterns on them. The roof looked like a helmet protecting the house.
By Alanis
In the middle of the dark woods stood a cabin on stilts.The house was no ordinary building.Firstly you had to go up some steps to get onto a wooden platform.The platform surround the Japanese house like a giant wooden moat.The house was 4 storey tall, one of which was below the wooden floor.A huge wooden roof sat proudly on top like a giant skateboard ramp.A single Japanese warrior kept guard.Keeping watch on a dark and cold night. The moonlight acted as a giant torch so everyone could see.
James M 😀
Well done James
From Evie.p 🙂
Great use of vocabulary James, it’s awesome! 🙂 From Connor
Cool stuff James from Matthew ; )
A book review of ‘ Mr Gum and the secret hideout ‘
Author: Andy Stanton
Illustrator: David Tazzyman
The main character in this story is Mr Gum. Mr Gum is a very grumpy man and he hates children,animals,fun,comics,pop music,birthday parties,books,Christmas,sea side,computer games and he hates people called Colin. Mr Gum finds a hideout and he really likes it because it smells very bad and it isn’t tidy at all.
I really enjoyed reading this book,because it’s very funny and silly and Mr Gum is very grumpy. My favourite part was the first sentence when the story told you what Mr Gum likes and doesn’t like. My favourite character is Mr Gum because he is very funny,grumpy and he doesn’t like tiding. I would recommend this book for girls and boys that are aged 9 and over. Younger children that are under 9 may not understand this book very well, because they probably will not understand the words and the jokes in it. I would give this book a score of 93 out of 100 as it has funny parts in it.
By Alanis
A book review of there’s a spider in the bath!
Author:Neil Griffiths
Illustrated: Peggy Collins
Publisher: Red Robin
Storyline:
The story is set in a house, so it is not unusual. This story will tell you a lot about Stanley and the family. One thing he does hate is bath time! More then dentist,cabbage ( there is a surprise at the end…) so he took him as lone as he possibly can when he look in the bath there was a spider. The Main character is Stanley and get really frustrated with mum & dad.
My Most funny part is when dad gets trap in the spider, my favourite character is Stanley because he is uses a scene cat when he found the spider in the bath and the there was a spider in the bath. I Recommend that this should be for 2 a over because it got sun eye word . My score is 97%
By James
Mr McCann what’s the home work I don’t know because I hade to go to the doctors with gran and grandad. From Joseph.s 😎
Hi Joseph. Sorry that you missed the last day of school. The homework is to make sure you get your 3 good reads. Also, to finish your spirited away film review and post it on the blog. Hope that helps. Have a great Easter! 🙂
Mr McCann I’ve already got my three reads. From Joseph.s 😎